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A poem
From a cat........
When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, and all they Have to those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, wistful, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my cushioned chair, my toy, The well-loved lap, The gently stroking hand, The loving voice, The place I made in someone's heart, The love, that at the last Could help me to a peaceful, painless end Held in loving arms. If I should die, Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out some lonely, unloved cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy, The love I leave behind, 'Tis all I have to give. -- Margaret Trowton -- |
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A poem
Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a
better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Bill Graham wrote: From a cat........ When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, and all they Have to those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, wistful, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my cushioned chair, my toy, The well-loved lap, The gently stroking hand, The loving voice, The place I made in someone's heart, The love, that at the last Could help me to a peaceful, painless end Held in loving arms. If I should die, Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out some lonely, unloved cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy, The love I leave behind, 'Tis all I have to give. -- Margaret Trowton -- -- You'd be crazy to e-mail me with the crazy. But leave the div alone. -- Whoever bans a book, shall be banished. Whoever burns a book, shall burn. |
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A poem
"Patok" wrote in message ... Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. |
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A poem
Bill Graham wrote:
"Patok" wrote in message Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. That's perfectly OK. It's all subjective tastes, after all. I tried to change it, because it was grating when I read it, even though I liked it very much (heh, otherwise I wouldn't bother, obviously). I re-read both versions now, again, and yeah, I think I /did/ improve it. Or at least, I produced a version that /I/ like better. -- You'd be crazy to e-mail me with the crazy. But leave the div alone. -- Whoever bans a book, shall be banished. Whoever burns a book, shall burn. |
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A poem
"Patok" wrote in message ... Bill Graham wrote: "Patok" wrote in message Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. That's perfectly OK. It's all subjective tastes, after all. I tried to change it, because it was grating when I read it, even though I liked it very much (heh, otherwise I wouldn't bother, obviously). I re-read both versions now, again, and yeah, I think I /did/ improve it. Or at least, I produced a version that /I/ like better. Well, I think I probably like the spontaneity of the original......And if it isn't perfect, well, after all, it's supposed to have been written by a cat!....:^) |
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A poem
On Fri, 2 Jul 2010 07:34:07 -0700, "Bill Graham"
wrote: "Patok" wrote in message ... Bill Graham wrote: "Patok" wrote in message Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. That's perfectly OK. It's all subjective tastes, after all. I tried to change it, because it was grating when I read it, even though I liked it very much (heh, otherwise I wouldn't bother, obviously). I re-read both versions now, again, and yeah, I think I /did/ improve it. Or at least, I produced a version that /I/ like better. Well, I think I probably like the spontaneity of the original......And if it isn't perfect, well, after all, it's supposed to have been written by a cat!....:^) Right, and their grammer is usually poor. |
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A poem
dgk wrote:
On Fri, 2 Jul 2010 07:34:07 -0700, "Bill Graham" wrote: "Patok" wrote in message ... Bill Graham wrote: "Patok" wrote in message Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. That's perfectly OK. It's all subjective tastes, after all. I tried to change it, because it was grating when I read it, even though I liked it very much (heh, otherwise I wouldn't bother, obviously). I re-read both versions now, again, and yeah, I think I /did/ improve it. Or at least, I produced a version that /I/ like better. Well, I think I probably like the spontaneity of the original......And if it isn't perfect, well, after all, it's supposed to have been written by a cat!....:^) Right, and their grammer is usually poor. But the meaning is the same. Best wishes. MLB |
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A poem
This is one of my favorites. I would like to think one of my cats would
write something like this........ "Bill Graham" wrote in message ... From a cat........ When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, and all they Have to those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, wistful, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my cushioned chair, my toy, The well-loved lap, The gently stroking hand, The loving voice, The place I made in someone's heart, The love, that at the last Could help me to a peaceful, painless end Held in loving arms. If I should die, Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out some lonely, unloved cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy, The love I leave behind, 'Tis all I have to give. -- Margaret Trowton -- |
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A poem
Bill Graham wrote:
"Patok" wrote in message ... Bill Graham wrote: "Patok" wrote in message Touching sentiment and feeling, but unsatisfactory execution. As a better poet than Margaret Trowton, whoever she is, I've tried to improve it a bit: When humans die, they make a will To leave their homes, their things, their pets, To those they love. I too would make a will, if I could write. To some poor, yearning, lonely stray I'd leave my happy home, My dish, my cozy bed, my toys, The well-loved lap and gently stroking hand, The soothing voice, The love, that at the least Would help me to a peaceful, painless end, In loving arms If I should die. Oh! Do not say: "No more a pet I'll have To grieve me by its loss." Seek out a lost and lonely cat And give my place to him. This is my legacy - The love I leave behind. -- Margaret Trowton, edited by Patok -- Nice......I am certainly not a critic of poetry, and I am terrible at writing it, but I still have to say (without knowing or understanding why) that I prefer the original. That's perfectly OK. It's all subjective tastes, after all. I tried to change it, because it was grating when I read it, even though I liked it very much (heh, otherwise I wouldn't bother, obviously). I re-read both versions now, again, and yeah, I think I /did/ improve it. Or at least, I produced a version that /I/ like better. Well, I think I probably like the spontaneity of the original......And if it isn't perfect, well, after all, it's supposed to have been written by a cat!....:^) Well, yes, but cats are supposed to be elegant and smooth, you know. The original was clumsy and trotting, as if written by a dog. -- You'd be crazy to e-mail me with the crazy. But leave the div alone. -- Whoever bans a book, shall be banished. Whoever burns a book, shall burn. |
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